new original...

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:26 am

dmbguitar718 wrote:hahahaha

what day, andy?

8th brotha

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:26 am

eliot1171 wrote:Hey Andy, I'd like to help you out. I'm kinda the opp as you. I'm not very good at guitar but I feel I have a decent voice (sample: http://www.purevolume.com/eliotmays) and a good ear for what sounds good and works. I'll keep workin on the song IF you want. Let me know.

absolutely man, ive heard your voice and its good. anything you can contribute. id love to work with ya.

gumbomadness · Post by **gumbomadness** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:53 am

i like it.. .but you need to keep it flowing. a metronome might help. .. you just.. need to flow and keep the timing. otherwise i really really like it.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 10:53 am

thanks for the comment gumbo

deceptivehero · Post by **deceptivehero** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 11:28 am

outside the fact that your rhythm is still kind of sketchy in parts, thought it was a pretty cool little piece. It's definately a pretty hard piece to write lyrics for, especially for me because if I don't write the music I never know where to go with the lyrics.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 11:46 am

well to help make the lyrics easier to write, i used the same progression for the entire song. the chorus is strummed and the verse is just so pieced together riffs from the powerchord versions on Emin C7 (i think its c7... X23033) G D.

eliot1171 · Post by **eliot1171** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 7:07 pm

Hey Andy, I like it but its a bitch to get lyrics to stick. I wouldnt be able to get you a recorded copy anyway because I have a cold, but I'll keep workin on it.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 7:12 pm

eliot1171 wrote:Hey Andy, I like it but its a bitch to get lyrics to stick. I wouldnt be able to get you a recorded copy anyway because I have a cold, but I'll keep workin on it.

the verse is probably hardest, try just playing a basic progression instead of the picking section. its just a slow emin c g d progression. then plug it in and see how it fits. thanks for workin on it elliot

brandtmarc · Post by **brandtmarc** » Wed Feb 02, 2005 5:07 pm

Hey
Just wanted to say that is a kickass riff/tune I really like it... No matter for how long or how bad you keep the timing, it is really hard to write and record such a catchy tune in my ears...
Pure Dave quality material man... keep posting that kinda stuff

Marc

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Wed Feb 02, 2005 5:08 pm

thanks man

lyrics101 · Post by **lyrics101** » Wed Feb 02, 2005 7:12 pm

The rhythm isn't bad at all (although I haven't been really paying attention, since I'm reading as I go). I can get you some vocals just as soon as my mic gets flown out here from Nebraska.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Wed Feb 02, 2005 9:00 pm

i take it you write lyrics... lyrics? im excited!

yworry69 · Post by **yworry69** » Thu Feb 03, 2005 12:58 am

the rhythm is the worst part. It's pretty catchy though and I didn't mind the harmonics.

lyrics101 · Post by **lyrics101** » Thu Feb 03, 2005 1:06 pm

praisedave wrote:i take it you write lyrics... lyrics? im excited!

I sing and write lyrics, yeah. We used to do Dave and acoustic Tool/A Perfect Circle covers for open mic back in high school. Our version of Judith kicked ass. I just moved to the east coast, though, so I'm waiting for a lot of my shit to get sent out here. We had a lot of hip-hop/folk/jazz influenced stuff going on, since my friend was a dj. Master scratcher, most def. Sometimes we'd delve into some Beastie Boys influenced rap.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Thu Feb 03, 2005 4:20 pm

coolness, whenever ya get to it