new original...

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sat Jan 29, 2005 3:48 pm

I wrote an original which i feel is very cool.

I would like somebody to write lyrics and sing them for me.

Thank you that is all.

http://www.purevolume.com/andymangold

edit: (for writing lyrics) arrangement is: intro, chorus, verse, verse, chorus, verse, chorus, breakdown (lyricless), chorus, chorus, outro

Tranman66 · Post by **Tranman66** » Sat Jan 29, 2005 6:24 pm

very nice, this can be a cool instrumental as welll. i like it man, your best work.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sat Jan 29, 2005 6:38 pm

thanks man.

dmbguitar718 · Post by **dmbguitar718** » Sat Jan 29, 2005 6:54 pm

I was born in Jully 1988 as well.

Listening now.

MWR · Post by **MWR** » Sat Jan 29, 2005 8:11 pm

Keep going with the riff in the very beggining. That's the only part of the song I liked.
This doesn't build at all. Each section is stapled together, in other words it doesn't sound very cohesive.
Also the harmonics don't fit imo. Sounds like you were just trying to use them without any purpose.
And please use a metronome. I know you haven't been playing very long and good rhythm will come with time but forget all these other "flashy" things you're doing and try to get a good groove going.

GSR · Post by **GSR** » Sat Jan 29, 2005 8:14 pm

dmbguitar718 wrote:I was born in Jully 1988 as well.

Listening now.

Damn, you're younger than I am, and are one hell of a beast with a guitar, judging from your tabs.

I coulda sworn you were 20something.

Dheibs · Post by **Dheibs** » Sat Jan 29, 2005 8:24 pm

i think it would be tough to make GOOD lyrics for this song...but i very much like it. nice job man

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:01 am

MWR wrote:Keep going with the riff in the very beggining. That's the only part of the song I liked.
This doesn't build at all. Each section is stapled together, in other words it doesn't sound very cohesive.
Also the harmonics don't fit imo. Sounds like you were just trying to use them without any purpose.
And please use a metronome. I know you haven't been playing very long and good rhythm will come with time but forget all these other "flashy" things you're doing and try to get a good groove going.

aw, you no like the harmonics? i came up with the progression first (chorus) and kinda forced myself to come up with the verse, so thats why its not as cohesive as i would like. i did use a metronome

. you can tap your foot to it...

thanks for the comments mike.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:02 am

Dheibs wrote:i think it would be tough to make GOOD lyrics for this song...but i very much like it. nice job man

thanks. i agree its tough to make lyrics for the song... thats why i turned to the boards

nobody gonna attempt lyrics? i suck so bad at writing them

Tranman66 · Post by **Tranman66** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:03 am

dmbguitar718 wrote:I was born in Jully 1988 as well.

Listening now.

same here!

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:05 am

thats clearly thge best month in the best year ever.

Tranman66 · Post by **Tranman66** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:08 am

oh wait sorry, i am in January. my bad.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:10 am

your out of the best month ever club

dmbguitar718 · Post by **dmbguitar718** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:17 am

hahahaha

what day, andy?

eliot1171 · Post by **eliot1171** » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:24 am

Hey Andy, I'd like to help you out. I'm kinda the opp as you. I'm not very good at guitar but I feel I have a decent voice (sample: http://www.purevolume.com/eliotmays) and a good ear for what sounds good and works. I'll keep workin on the song IF you want. Let me know.