New song by me - Falling From The Clouds

[Xoosh]

Falling...

Comments etc would be appreciated. Im going to be adding conga drums and an adhesive violin part (similar to last stop). I actually wrote this song with little reference to last stop however i see / hear the obvious similarities. I wrote it when i was high on more then one drug so im not sure what the influence was. however it's developed into this now. Like i said not completely done. Any suggestions would be appreciated. this is like a pre-final rough draft.

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[ticohans]

hey Xoosh, unfortunately, I don't have time to give you a real solid critique right now as I'm running around like crazy trying to get stuff together before I head out of town. and then I'll be gone for a month. but after that, I hope to be able to sit down and give the stuff a good listen.

One quick thing, off the top of my head after listening to it ONLY once: another one of your near finished songs had a lot of water ambient noise as well, including the thunder. It's all really cool, but I don't know how often you want to use it as I think it might be something that becomes cliche quite easily. If I remember the other one correctly, you used the thunder in the beginning and end, as well as a couple climactic spots, just like in this one. I KNEW there was going to be a thunderclap at the end of the song because of the previous song with similar effects. I think the thunderstuff would be best used if it were surprising. Right now, it's surprising the first time around. After that it wears on you kinda quickly, I think. One more quick note: I really like the progressions and the voicings of the rhythm guitar, but it would be great if the lead were solidified a little more. I think your lines could be slightly more melodic. Usually, solo/improv stuff is more up-tempo, but you have longer sustain on your solo line. If you're going for the sustain effect, which I like a lot with these songs, I think you could make it just a little more melodic, and a little less improvy. Once I get time, if you're still working on this, I'll go back and pick out different times where I feel this way about the melodic lines.

[dbernard]

very pleasing to the ear do you not write lyrics?

[Xoosh]

Thanks for the comments. I do write lyrics, these first 3 songs simply dont have any

Im thinking about re-recording it. And i agree with the thunder thing... it's kinda the last song i had planned on using it.

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[djs488]

it sounds to me that this is recorded on two tracks. the solo part sounds a bit choppy. you seem to only be putting together about 3 notes at a time, especially at the beginning. I think it would be better if you had a more lengthy riff, sort of a solo, somewhere in the middle. Maybe as like a chorus, even though there are no words. The thunder and lightning effects are really cool, i dont think they are over used at all. IT seems to be the whole theme of the song. I would do away with the voices though. They sound a little creepy at some parts. Anyway, great job. A lot better than something I could do.



David