first attempt at lyrics

[Easy E]

Here's a little poem i wrote that i have tried to put up against every guitar riff ive written, anybody have suggestions?

Another one lost to my neurotic sensibility
What did it mean, how she said what she said to me
You tell me to be happy first but I can’t pretend
Happiness falls flat when I can’t feel your sweat,
In the palm of my hand, why can’t you understand?
Apathy to the heart is dangerous to the mind
Too much free time to wonder what we are

So this is where I stop thinking at all
Fate throws my head against the wall
Open my eyes and learn not to question
Anything you do
Anymore

Fall on my face for the millionth time
You think by now I wouldn’t jump at first signs
Of mutual smiles, devious eyes
The way your cheeks swell and colorize
You’ve got the best hand, I know I should fold
When all my bets are called and I’m sold
On the jokes you recite about how things might be
Wishful thinking is funny when nothing’s stormy…

So this is where I stop thinking at all
Fate throws my head against the wall
Open my eyes and learn not to question
Anything you do
Anymore

[Swe dmbfan]

Fall on my face for the millionth time
You think by now I wouldn’t jump at first signs
Of mutual smiles, devious eyes
The way your cheeks swell and colorize
You’ve got the best hand, I know I should fold
When all my bets are called and I’m sold


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i like that

[gumbomadness]

insert a one syllable word between -head- and -against- such as... hard, or right, straight, ..etc.. just for flow. It needs an extra syllable to match up with the top one ^_^ i like it tho.