another new original

JeffVyain · Post by **JeffVyain** » Fri Sep 24, 2004 12:37 am

wrote this tonight...
click on play button on right side of "step away"
http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/alb ... 18&alid=-1
have fun

jmasta · Post by **jmasta** » Tue Sep 28, 2004 8:51 am

I like that, the riff is solid, and your voice is...unique to say the least. Altogether it's nice, especially the echo. bravo

CBalvarez · Post by **CBalvarez** » Tue Sep 28, 2004 2:32 pm

pretty good stuff man, i like it.

deceptivehero · Post by **deceptivehero** » Tue Sep 28, 2004 3:34 pm

real good, I liked your singing and the whole feel of the piece. Keep those coming.

JeffVyain · Post by **JeffVyain** » Sun Oct 03, 2004 11:46 pm

i'm not too interested in my voice... i'm trying to hone in on some songwriting skills. do you think that song would be worth marketing around at all? i'm in nashville and it wouldn't be too hard to take it somewhere, but i'd like some objective opinions about it rather than just my friends saying, "yea, go for it..." is it worth my time?

GreyBlueAnt · Post by **GreyBlueAnt** » Mon Oct 04, 2004 1:16 am

If you're interested in marketing it, then go for it, unless this isn't the best you have, or that you think you're capable of. It's good. Technically, if this is your final cut, vocals were better towards the end, guitar was buzzing a few times. Cello in there? Woulda been nice to have a small cello improve in besides just following the baseline. But what do i know. take it for what it's worth.

JeffVyain · Post by **JeffVyain** » Mon Oct 04, 2004 9:53 am

yea i guess the idea behind it is--can you see someone else playing it (adding drums, bass, whatever) and the song making money? does it communicate well, etc? thanks for the input

dmb_tatertot · Post by **dmb_tatertot** » Sat Oct 09, 2004 10:23 am

i thought it was solid work. If you are interested in really marketing it, you might wanna re-record and eliminate the fret buzzing and improve the quality of the walkdown you have in the verse. The vocals were unique, but solid as well. I wasn't too fond of the lyrics, but overall good work.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sat Oct 09, 2004 12:44 pm

thats good stuff man i like ur voice

katie · Post by **katie** » Thu Oct 14, 2004 2:57 pm

really clear guitar, the emotions coming through. neat lyrics, different perspective, unique.

some really nice lyrics.

thanks for sharing your work. cool to hear.

yknSTONE · Post by **yknSTONE** » Thu Oct 14, 2004 3:46 pm

After listening to this a couple times... IMO It Reminds me of Howie day song "Ghost" there some similarities.