original and #41

filmdude100cms · Post by **filmdude100cms** » Tue Sep 21, 2004 9:49 pm

havent listened to the quality...

#41

originals...
#6

New Original

tell me what you think.

i-am-me · Post by **i-am-me** » Tue Sep 21, 2004 10:37 pm

good for posting some stuff.

now i can't get the #41 to work. so i couldn't listen. and your original, at the beginning reminds me a little too much of seek up. but later it becomes much more your own. i liked it. i liked the strumming you got going on there.

Swe dmbfan · Post by **Swe dmbfan** » Tue Sep 21, 2004 10:42 pm

#41 = nothing

MWR · Post by **MWR** » Wed Sep 22, 2004 2:56 am

Not bad. I think you should try and mix up the strumming pattern though. I like that pattern but it looses it's freshness after a while.
It seems that there was some basic shit that you just didn't bother with like tuning the guitar.

You also don't seem to be very into it like you recorded one take and were like "fuck it might as well throw it up there". Where's the passion man!? I know you have it in you.
I understand that these are rough ideas but please try and put a little more effort into it. You can't go thru the motions and expect people to be blown away. Get it as clean and tight as possible or else whats the point ya know?

I want to hear another version soon and it better have more energy.

If this was your best attempt out of several than disregard my comments and replace it with "keep at it".
Sorry to rip into you just trying to bring out that inner beast.

taylordb · Post by **taylordb** » Wed Sep 22, 2004 5:22 am

link to #41 does not work

i-am-me · Post by **i-am-me** » Wed Sep 22, 2004 10:46 am

MWR wrote:Not bad. I think you should try and mix up the strumming pattern though. I like that pattern but it looses it's freshness after a while.
It seems that there was some basic shit that you just didn't bother with like tuning the guitar.
You also don't seem to be very into it like you recorded one take and were like "fuck it might as well throw it up there". Where's the passion man!? I know you have it in you.
I understand that these are rough ideas but please try and put a little more effort into it. You can't go thru the motions and expect people to be blown away. Get it as clean and tight as possible or else whats the point ya know?

I want to hear another version soon and it better have more energy.

If this was your best attempt out of several than disregard my comments and replace it with "keep at it".
Sorry to rip into you just trying to bring out that inner beast.

that's actually very good advice mike. i see what you mean, that's exactly what i did. one take, done.

now fix the #41 link!

88Fingers · Post by **88Fingers** » Wed Sep 22, 2004 3:39 pm

i-am-me wrote:
now fix the #41 link!

Just take out the "#" in the song title and page name and it'll work. A "#" on an html document is an entity, and therefore doesn't translate often the way that it should.

filmdude100cms · Post by **filmdude100cms** » Wed Sep 22, 2004 3:52 pm

fixed.... and the guitar was in tune, but capoed at the third, and thats also the reason it sounds like seek up, if you cape it at the third, so a G power chord, go to a 5xx6xx then to a 7xx7xx you get the notes of "fall back again" part... see i wrote this in standard but i thought it needed an extra little sometihng so i capoed it at the 3rd, it worked, and i really just now realized that intro is seek up, but owell, sounds good...

umm, no i wasnt playing with passion really, i think mostly cause i had just come in from a party and i was tired, but ill do one over, cause #41 didnt record for some reason and i thusly i must re-do both....

EDIT: new versons added

Ando · Post by **Ando** » Wed Sep 22, 2004 5:13 pm

Not bad.

I didn't listen to any of the originals, but yeah.

41 seems a little bit too fast, and you reall need to 'enunciate' the hammer in the verse.

filmdude100cms · Post by **filmdude100cms** » Thu Sep 23, 2004 3:54 pm

i-am-me · Post by **i-am-me** » Thu Sep 23, 2004 5:45 pm

Alright. here's what i have to say about your #41...

First off, like Andy said, yea it was way too fast. i think you may want to start off the intro with picking out the notes one by one, then a nice strum. and the verse strumming is a little off. Listen to some more recordings, and you'll hear what i'm talkinga bout. you hit some wrong notes here and there, maybe it was a wrong string. And what andy said about the hammer, definetly. that hammer is awesome.

but mainly...SLOOOOOW DOWN.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Thu Sep 23, 2004 9:02 pm

to be honest man, i think ur writing is behind ur playing. ur obviously a great player but the originals seem very repetitive... heres how i break it down:

Subject......SUCKS-----------AVERAGE------------OWNS ASS
ur playing ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: 44
ur writing ::::::::::::::::::::::: 23
linkin park -3.5 (zing)

its got potential. i cant really talk yet cause i havent posted anything... hmm i should do that.

filmdude100cms · Post by **filmdude100cms** » Thu Sep 23, 2004 9:33 pm

praisedave wrote:to be honest man, i think ur writing is behind ur playing. ur obviously a great player but the originals seem very repetitive... heres how i break it down:

Subject......SUCKS-----------AVERAGE------------OWNS ASS
ur playing ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: 44
ur writing ::::::::::::::::::::::: 23
linkin park -3.5 (zing)

its got potential. i cant really talk yet cause i havent posted anything... hmm i should do that.

hmmm, i got some more stuff. but yeah repetitive, these all have lyrics though.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Fri Sep 24, 2004 1:47 pm

filmdude100cms wrote:
praisedave wrote:to be honest man, i think ur writing is behind ur playing. ur obviously a great player but the originals seem very repetitive... heres how i break it down:

Subject......SUCKS-----------AVERAGE------------OWNS ASS
ur playing ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: 44
ur writing ::::::::::::::::::::::: 23
linkin park -3.5 (zing)

its got potential. i cant really talk yet cause i havent posted anything... hmm i should do that.
hmmm, i got some more stuff. but yeah repetitive, these all have lyrics though.

lyrics are good they help take attention away from repetitiveness. (ihopethatsaword)

filmdude100cms · Post by **filmdude100cms** » Fri Sep 24, 2004 3:32 pm

ill do a post for lyrics...