2 originals of mine

HumbleMonkey · Post by **HumbleMonkey** » Sun Sep 19, 2004 3:53 pm

here are two of my original songs. very simple but i think they have a cool tune

http://www.angelfire.com/music6/humblemonkey/

If it doesnt work at first just close the window and try again, i had a few problems before, thanks

dmbguitar718 · Post by **dmbguitar718** » Sun Sep 19, 2004 4:17 pm

Hm. I don't really know what to say. Way to Davish for me.

MWR · Post by **MWR** » Sun Sep 19, 2004 5:21 pm

You should take the best of both those tunes and combine them. They sound a little to similar to stand on their own one right after the other.
I'm not going to say the playing was great because, well, it wasn't.

We all were starting out at one point though and it sounds like your on the right track.
My only other qualm is that you really should have some lyrics to go along with these basic rhythm tracks. If your making an instrumental than you have to have some sort of melody. Of course there are people who think lyrics will improve anything but I disagree with that.
Can't Sing? Can't Play Lead? Who cares just give it a try.

Keep posting

dmbguitar718 · Post by **dmbguitar718** » Sun Sep 19, 2004 5:27 pm

MWR wrote:You should take the best of both those tunes and combine them. They sound a little to similar to stand on their own one right after the other.
I'm not going to say the playing was great because, well, it wasn't.
We all were starting out at one point though and it sounds like your on the right track.
My only other qualm is that you really should have some lyrics to go along with these basic rhythm tracks. If your making an instrumental than you have to have some sort of melody. Of course there are people who think lyrics will improve anything but I disagree with that.
Can't Sing? Can't Play Lead? Who cares just give it a try.
Keep posting

hey can you sign on aim now?

HumbleMonkey · Post by **HumbleMonkey** » Sun Sep 19, 2004 5:58 pm

thanks for the feedback, i will try and combined them. my playing was not good i will agree, i have been playing for over 3 years now but i just started writing my own stuff. im still working on these so i know the playing was off. i didnt get to lyrics yet, waiting for some inspiration. i will keep posting stuff because i am better than i sounded in those, thanks again

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sun Sep 19, 2004 9:14 pm

i like this stuff better than your warehouse intro, it does need more though, very repetitive and very similar between them. keep posting