new original - nothing special but still kinda cool I think

[rampaged.congt]

Hey guys

Check out my song - it's not really a great tune - but I like the way the lines of the lyrics go into each other...if you know what I mean...

http://www.angelfire.com/jazz/rampaged. ... kesong.mp3

name of the song: rain on your birthday

[Jc]

Guitar sounds a bit buzzy, don't think it's your playing, just high action maybe. Your voice sounds good though.

[rampaged.congt]

thx jc...
yeah I know my recording quality sucks cuz I just have this bad computer mic and no professional program cuz my computer sucks...

[skpr41]

very enjoyable song!

just a couple of comments, the squeaking was kind of distracting and the guitar was a bit repeititve. maybe a changeup somewhere in there might make it even better. but what do i know...

overall very nice song!

[katie]

I think the way the lyrics go into one another is a sweet technique! I feel like I'm at an open mic. save them wisely, precisely

I like the mellow guitar it suites your voice

till dawn she flew away from me...

keep at it, you got some goods!

the whistling is neat. It will be fun to watch you progress, well done ~

[ElGuitarrista]

Good job. I like the jam. The quality of the recording could be improved. It is quiet at the beginning and seems to get to a better volume about halfway through. I like the whistling. I think there could be more contrast between verse and chorus... it seems to flow straight though... perhaps because the beat stays consistent. Good vocals too... keep writing.

[rampaged.congt]

thx for the nice comments you guys.
I'm gonna try to screw around with the song a little bit more to see I can throw in a changeup somewhere.