Another instrumental for you guys and gals

JacknCoke · Post by **JacknCoke** » Mon Dec 08, 2003 2:34 am

just a little thing I did...Any feedback is appreciated..

http://home.comcast.net/~edwardcw/Song_For_Autumn.wma

JacknCoke · Post by **JacknCoke** » Mon Dec 08, 2003 3:42 pm

nobody has anything to say

paywad927 · Post by **paywad927** » Mon Dec 08, 2003 4:09 pm

i really liked it. i dont know much about how to critique or whatever so i wont. but overall i think it was really good. fun to listen to.

GreedylilPig · Post by **GreedylilPig** » Mon Dec 08, 2003 4:23 pm

I thought it was great. Very easy to listen to, very relaxing. Definitely keeping it around to listen to in the future.

However, I do think you play some notes that might not be in the key of your rhythm. Some of them just seem out of place. Furthermore, a lot of your notes are dulled. Examples: :24-26, :40, :49, 1:30.

My favorite part of the song is the intro, beautifully done. The lead comes in at the perfect time. Excellent work overall, just work on your lead a little bit.

I'd love to hear more from you.

Matty Boom · Post by **Matty Boom** » Mon Dec 08, 2003 5:17 pm

I like it, got a good feel to it....I agree with greedy though, there are too many dulled notes

Xoosh · Post by **Xoosh** » Mon Dec 08, 2003 5:41 pm

hey there,
my critique is as follows:
the first five seconds (until guitar 2 comes in) it sounds like the beginning of a very old Jason Mraz song. Which is neat and nicely done (but it's only the first 5 seconds).

The song is full of guitar 2 errors, slip-ups, frett buzz, off key hits, and it seems like the entire song's solo happens in the 12+ fret range. this is a combination for a rather dull, annoying solo.

The guitar 1 riff is rather nice i thikn i would like that on its own outside of the guitar 2 stuff but it desperately needs variation.

the song as it stands now is extremely shakey and weak IMHO. it honestly sounds like you hooked up a DL4 pedal to the guitar one and let it run for 2 minutes while trying to figure out what key you were in so that you could have a second guitar part for it.

keep workin at it.

regards,
xoosh

Fat_tony · Post by **Fat_tony** » Mon Dec 08, 2003 10:34 pm

music is like food, down to your personal taste. It tasted good, guitar 2 needs work and variation. i like the fallin feeling it gives very intune with the name i feel. add some voacls and i think you a wkd song

JacknCoke · Post by **JacknCoke** » Mon Dec 08, 2003 11:25 pm

Hey, thanks for the reviews guys...I agree there are flaws and im working on them...I'm still very raw with the guitar, only playing for a little over a year now....On the second guitar, I didnt use any scale known to man, or atleast that i know of, lol..I just threw some stuff together that sounded like it fit right.....But once again, thanks for the reviews, its a gigantic plus to hear that people, who know the guitar farely well, liked it...

horsmar15 · Post by **horsmar15** » Mon Dec 08, 2003 11:30 pm

ya i agree with the rest the second guitar could be alot better. Other than that the first guitar riff would make an excellent song if you had vocals. Otherwise i think the track is too repetitive to make a full instrumental out of

JacknCoke · Post by **JacknCoke** » Mon Dec 08, 2003 11:56 pm

Oh I agree, this is something i fooled around with..and xoosh, your almost right...the first guitar was looped, but i used acid pro instead

..... i just wanted something to work as a foundation so i could put a solo of some sort on top...I have been working on a song just using the first guitar as well...

Xoosh · Post by **Xoosh** » Tue Dec 09, 2003 12:01 am

well jack, it's the best way to learn to solo, that's what i did =) just loop some chords over and over again and figure out what works with it...

if you ever want some loops to work from let me know, i have a few that are progressively more difficult to work from but helped me.

/x

JacknCoke · Post by **JacknCoke** » Tue Dec 09, 2003 12:12 am

i might just take you up on that sometime xoosh, thanks for the offer...I'm still in the works of learning most of the scales and being able to use them anywhere on the guitar.....The only instructor I ever had (and that was only for a few weeks b/c he was ripping me off big time) taught my a few scales inbetween 4 frets and 4 frets only..he wouldnt go any further b/c "it will confuse you too much" so he says..ha