Check out my s#!t?

mbent4679 · Post by **mbent4679** » Tue Jan 02, 2007 12:15 pm

I'm new to this site but I have some recordings that need criticism. I'll post one for now.

http://www.sendspace.com/file/pv14go

http://www.sendspace.com/file/pv14go

Easy E · Post by **Easy E** » Tue Jan 02, 2007 12:17 pm

find yourself a wav to mp3 converter

mbent4679 · Post by **mbent4679** » Tue Jan 02, 2007 12:24 pm

Any free ones you know of I'm broke.

lyrics101 · Post by **lyrics101** » Tue Jan 02, 2007 4:49 pm

iTunes does it, at least on mac.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Tue Jan 02, 2007 4:50 pm

i assumed this was a spam post cause of the title,

what prgrm you recording in?

mbent4679 · Post by **mbent4679** » Tue Jan 02, 2007 9:33 pm

no spam post im a very underground artist looking for critics. sorry it's a wav file i do not know much about recording i just like to jam out in my room. think of my song as more of a live preformance as opposed to a live recording. I will get better at recording in tune to your guys ad vice and the money i have but please critic me on the song itself not just the recording for now. But still give me recording advice as well..

lyrics101 · Post by **lyrics101** » Wed Jan 03, 2007 10:58 am

We'd be happy to, if it wasn't going to take an ungodly amount of time to download it because it's a .wav.

mbent4679 · Post by **mbent4679** » Wed Jan 03, 2007 3:33 pm

http://www.sendspace.com/file/0h477i

Here you go sorry I don't know shit bout computers

Easy E · Post by **Easy E** » Wed Jan 03, 2007 3:37 pm

The guitar part isnt bad, I like a rhythmic strum. I guess you can blame your setup for vocals because I can't really understand anything you are saying

and we are all "underground artists" around here

mbent4679 · Post by **mbent4679** » Wed Jan 03, 2007 3:42 pm

Yea its a twelve dollar mic I'll repost it once i get new equipment.

mbent4679 · Post by **mbent4679** » Wed Jan 03, 2007 3:48 pm

Yea its a twelve dollar mic I'll repost it once i get new equipment.
Vs. 1
Here are the lyrics:
Brain is locked and
drugs are the key can't figure out
what the fucks the matter with me
all these choices I make
I hope there the best
one day I'll climb out of the hole and clean up all the mess

Chorus
cause I, I get high every single day of my life
as I try to obliged with this simple life this bull shit

vrs.2
wake up again
get high with my friend
I will be getting high until the end
when i'm alone
I twist up that bone
I will be smokin that shit to the dome

Walk around talk around all these people say
watcha got on your brain
can't you see i'm not the same I was (what felt like) 2,000 years ago

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Wed Jan 03, 2007 4:22 pm

cant wait to hear this

mbent4679 · Post by **mbent4679** » Wed Jan 03, 2007 8:14 pm

So what don't you like about it? I'd like to know so I can improve.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Wed Jan 03, 2007 8:29 pm

mbent4679 wrote:So what don't you like about it? I'd like to know so I can improve.

well your lyrics are empty, pointlessly vulgar, contradictory, riddled with very simple structure, cliche imagery, improper use of "obliged", some phrases i dont understand, and some vague reference to 2000 years ago...

ever think about going pro as a rapper? you'd kick some ass

mbent4679 · Post by **mbent4679** » Wed Jan 03, 2007 8:58 pm

wow ur a dick your lyrics arn't any less cliche. I wrote that song when i was 15 and others liked it for it's light feel oon getting high. Most people who listen to music are not gunna notice simple contradiction. I'll give you some newer stuff later. i was gunna go in cronilogical order.