http://www.benpezzner.com/DMB/BTCS/02-Rapunzel.mp3
I think I need to redo the outro solo... it's a bit messy. Thoughts?
Any comments on the mix? Should any of the voices be brought out more?
Thanks,
Ben
Rapunzel on the cello - please critique
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I love the way you did this with the percussion. The only thing i would say is the percussion does sound a little shallow on top of the cello, i would nudge the bass up a little bit on the percussion, even though its not necessarily meant to be a thumping track, it should be a little deeper and louder imo.
I think the outro is pretty awesome and doesnt sound messy to me at all. Which was a little unexpected, as i was listening mid song i expected it to be a bit messy, for whatever reason. but it sounded spot on to me.
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I think the outro is pretty awesome and doesnt sound messy to me at all. Which was a little unexpected, as i was listening mid song i expected it to be a bit messy, for whatever reason. but it sounded spot on to me.
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very nice ben, very nice
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dude i never really looked round your sight, the warehouse intro is mind blowing and i just had fun playing so right with your accapella,
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Little things that I'm going to be wary about, and I mostly wouldn't bring this up, but for your caliber it's the little things that can be the most annoying 
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In some of the beginning phrasing when you're imitating the vocals, some of the ends of the phrases seemed to have a slight intonation problem (very minimal and especially well considering the instrument that you're playing) and I'm mostly thinking this is just a fault of my own ear. I'll listen over it again and pay particular attention to it. (Just listened to it again, and it is does sound a little off).
Most likely the mix, but I don't really like how much the percussion bit stuck out, it seemed a bit too overpowering for it outside the chorus.
You did very well with the multiple cello parts during the chorus, I felt like they complimented each other very well. Excellent job on that, definately a favorite part of this cover.
I agree somewhat with your solo being a bit messy. It's nothing a little more practice wouldn't fix though (or hell, I don't think practice is necessary, probably just another run through). The high run you do with the solo isn't necessarily my cup of tea, but I still appreciate if very much- you have quite the beautiful techinque on this instrument.
Overall, I think you are an amazing musician. I am amazed by all the songs I've heard you do, particularly with the cello. I've always been quite fond of it and I am very jealous of your skill in it.
.In some of the beginning phrasing when you're imitating the vocals, some of the ends of the phrases seemed to have a slight intonation problem (very minimal and especially well considering the instrument that you're playing) and I'm mostly thinking this is just a fault of my own ear. I'll listen over it again and pay particular attention to it. (Just listened to it again, and it is does sound a little off).
Most likely the mix, but I don't really like how much the percussion bit stuck out, it seemed a bit too overpowering for it outside the chorus.
You did very well with the multiple cello parts during the chorus, I felt like they complimented each other very well. Excellent job on that, definately a favorite part of this cover.
I agree somewhat with your solo being a bit messy. It's nothing a little more practice wouldn't fix though (or hell, I don't think practice is necessary, probably just another run through). The high run you do with the solo isn't necessarily my cup of tea, but I still appreciate if very much- you have quite the beautiful techinque on this instrument.
Overall, I think you are an amazing musician. I am amazed by all the songs I've heard you do, particularly with the cello. I've always been quite fond of it and I am very jealous of your skill in it.