My song 0CTOBER...feedback please!!!

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My song 0CTOBER...feedback please!!!

Unread post by firedancer86 » Tue Jan 14, 2003 9:21 pm

This is actually one that I have perfected and it is not completely improv (only about 30% this time). This is some of my own creation that is complete and ready for flaming, kudos and whatever else you have to give!
Kinda' reminicent of Heathcliff's Haiku Warriors in the style of fingerpicking in the verses...anyway, if you listen to any, PLEASE LISTEN TO THIS AND GIVE ME FEEDBACK :D




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Unread post by schubox » Tue Jan 14, 2003 9:34 pm

sounds good, did you use any effects, or was it just straight you? I like the slaps, do you sing or just play music?

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Unread post by firedancer86 » Tue Jan 14, 2003 9:36 pm

schubox wrote:sounds good, did you use any effects, or was it just straight you? I like the slaps, do you sing or just play music?

Just straight Chett Atkins SST playing 8) . Yeah, remember i just did the talent show audition in which I sang and played the Stone.
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Unread post by schubox » Tue Jan 14, 2003 9:54 pm

oh yeah the talent show, i'm retarded, so how old are you if you have been playing for 9 years, and are in a talent show that I am assuming is high school or college?

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Unread post by firedancer86 » Tue Jan 14, 2003 9:58 pm

Just turned 16 not a month ago :wink:
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Unread post by ticohans » Tue Jan 14, 2003 11:55 pm

I really like it. Nice jazzy feel. Chord progressions that make sense, but without being predictable. The one weak part I think is the section that begins around 1:25. Doesn't seem to fit with the vibe of the song, and the progression is quite blah when compared to the quirky unpredictability of the rest of the song. I'd scrap that part. Other than that, I'd say it's good. I especially like the transition back into the A material before the end. Good stuff.

(of course it could be a little cleaner)

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Unread post by firedancer86 » Tue Jan 14, 2003 11:57 pm

Thanks for the constructive criticism hans.

I will take that one into consideration.

I just like the "bendy" lead 3/4 the way though the song 8)
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Unread post by ticohans » Tue Jan 14, 2003 11:59 pm

I agree that the lead is fun, but if you can find another progression to work it in to, I think it would be even better.

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Unread post by firedancer86 » Wed Jan 15, 2003 12:06 am

ticohans wrote:I agree that the lead is fun, but if you can find another progression to work it in to, I think it would be even better.

Did you check out my 12-string improv???

I value your opinion and would like to hear it :)
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Unread post by cave_cricket » Wed Jan 15, 2003 11:25 am

your account isn't working anymore.

Peace,

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