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New Song...rip it apart if you have too...lol

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Hey guys....I got a song I just recorded I was hoping someone or some people could give me a little bit of feedback as to what they think of it.....

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i like it
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Post by jellyfish »

Very, very, nice voice. Guitar was solid too.

Good song.

However, there wasn't too much variation throughout the song.
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Post by MOE.PHISH »

i agree great song great voice. my only critiques...like peaver said a littler more variation would be great.

I want to say the first 30 seconds you had the same vocal pattern over your chords, you could mix it up a little bit. such as where you say "but i can learn".. maybe if u separated it like "but maybe iiii can learn" just throwing in a few more words instead of having a steady pattern would help ur variance. just my opinion what do i know! awesome song
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Post by douge006 »

jellyfish wrote:Very, very, nice voice. Guitar was solid too.

Good song.

However, there wasn't too much variation throughout the song.
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Bored about a minute into it.
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Post by RunsWithBuffalo »

I like this a lot, your voice is great and your guitar playing is very rythmic.

I agree variation would help but i wouldnt change the tune. What you have in an acoustic shell of what could be a great song. Just add other intruments to spice it up. Even some little guitar fills would be awesome.

Great job man
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Post by 6_strings_for_life »

the quality of this is great and your voice is also great. I agree with the others, it does get boring, but you have the begining of what would be an awesome song. Keep up the good work and thanks for posting.
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Post by eliot1171 »

DMBTabs.com; Welcome to it.

I must agree that I didn't feel a large enough transition between the verse and chorus. Voice was good and quality of the recording was good also.

Please keep posting. :thumbsup:
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