Dreamgirl *check out the live performance on page 2*

Kahn · Post by **Kahn** » Tue Jul 12, 2005 5:23 pm

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This is my acoustic version of Dreamgirl. Please listen and critique. I was using my crappy mic for the vocals, so they're a little quite. Please critique me!!!!!

jsgksu · Post by **jsgksu** » Tue Jul 12, 2005 5:24 pm

Was this inspired by girl A or B? j/k man.

Kahn · Post by **Kahn** » Tue Jul 12, 2005 5:26 pm

jsgksu wrote:Was this inspired by girl A or B? j/k man.

listen to it you bastard

dmbguitar718 · Post by **dmbguitar718** » Tue Jul 12, 2005 6:10 pm

It was ok.

Try some different stuff other than the normal strumming for the verse. (variations/sus' etc)

Tip: Don't use octaves - They're pretty corny. Also, the main riff struggles to keep up with the time.

The transition from the verse to the chorus could be a lot smoother. Try to have a guitar part lead into or something.

I know you probably going for something new for the breakdown, but lose the mutes. It doesn't fit well and it's distracting.

The rest was medicore. It was pretty basic strumming/singing with some second guitar stuff.

It was ok. Try to be a bit more creative with the music though.

stoca2 · Post by **stoca2** » Tue Jul 12, 2005 6:30 pm

so u sung this for Girl A to get back in her pants sweet....its pretty good. i think ur voice was a little to high pitched but what do i know i suck at guitar

sk8r · Post by **sk8r** » Tue Jul 12, 2005 6:45 pm

not bad at all... i have been playing this one alot lately and messing around with recording. its a fun song to me.

DMBFan63 · Post by **DMBFan63** » Tue Jul 12, 2005 9:23 pm

That was pretty good, but I agree, the octaves were kinda corny. Your voice is definately too high pitched for this song. I was disappointed there wasn't any chanting in the begining.

i like tictacs · Post by **i like tictacs** » Tue Jul 12, 2005 11:20 pm

Come, Simba.

i like tictacs · Post by **i like tictacs** » Tue Jul 12, 2005 11:46 pm

I liked it. But you got to let it flow more. I mean, the melody parts in the beginning. I just think that would sound better.

Your voice is good, but I don't think it works with the lyrics. The delivery wasn't suited to the song, but I think they'd be great on a number of different songs.

I really liked the ending by the way.

Nitro1515 · Post by **Nitro1515** » Wed Jul 13, 2005 1:25 am

I liked it. Good voice, the breakdown was cool with you doing Roi's part on guitar, Pat's right though that the mutes did seem a bit out of place. The only other problem I have with it is Dave for writing such shitty lyrics. When someone else besides him sings this song it just makes them sound that much worse.

Kahn · Post by **Kahn** » Wed Jul 13, 2005 1:41 am

thanks dor the feedback

mdel21 · Post by **mdel21** » Wed Jul 13, 2005 7:34 am

one more thing you suck at.

dmbS0MuchT0Say · Post by **dmbS0MuchT0Say** » Fri Jul 15, 2005 12:44 am

i just listened to your cover and i thought it was great, yeah it could have been smoother but overall i liked it. i thought the guitar playing was solid. your vocals were okay but i can definately hear you being awesome singing different songs. the mutes, i actually liked them but then again some people say im easily amused.

Kahn · Post by **Kahn** » Fri Jul 15, 2005 3:51 pm

thanks man

Del, you're such a hater

whatshername · Post by **whatshername** » Fri Jul 15, 2005 4:19 pm

i like it kahn

a little off-pitch in some areas, but not terribly so. guitar sounds good too except that also sounds a little bit off during the pre-chorus. but good job overall!

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Dreamgirl check out the live performance on page 2

Dreamgirl check out the live performance on page 2