New lyrics and song (pls critique)

seanbryantkbq · Post by **seanbryantkbq** » Fri Jul 01, 2005 2:06 pm

about a street i chill on. nice chill song. when its recorded

btw theres a new song called 68 simple on

http://www.myspace.com/thekilos

if you guys wouldnt mind critiquing both it would be great.

anyway, the lyrics...

Promontory

There was a place
Oh so connected to the face of the earth
Chased by my imagination
High on this magical love

Up on promontory
Let the chemicals let me breathe
One more smoke
I know I said I’d quit but the stars tonight won’t make
Me believe what I said

Which way is up
I hardly feel it
No more talking about my life
Lift me up
I don’t believe it
Me and this girl and this blanket
And a bottle of…

Ya know the stuff I was about to say
Baby hey
Don’t make me say it again
Maybe being high will let you in my friend
Sorry honey bunny, I’m only in it for the spin

But don’t give up
Or give in on Promontory
It’s a sin that were both lonely
I don’t care if you think this is love
It’s nothing more than you make it’
And keep that way

There’s still that place over there
Or was it that way?
You won’t remember when you’re blinded by…
Stumbling amidst the fireflies
Just trying to keep a train of thought on

Promontory baby
Let’s let this night get hazy
Es mucho bueno lady
Bring myself back here
For those harder times

I hardly feel it
Underneath these lovely streetlights
Lift me up
This place that if I could
I would retire the rest of my mind

Ya know the rest of this song I sing
Baby hey
Don’t make me sing it again
Maybe being high will let you in my friend
Sorry honey bunny, I’m only in it for the spin

But don’t give up
Or give in on Promontory
It’s a sin that were both lonely
I don’t care if you think this is love
It’s nothing more than you make it’
And keep that way

Up on Promontory…

sunglassesatnight · Post by **sunglassesatnight** » Fri Jul 01, 2005 6:57 pm

I didn't listen and won't, but I saw there was Spanish in the lyrics. You don't look Hispanic.

a1075dd63aa12 · Post by **a1075dd63aa12** » Sat Jul 02, 2005 1:54 am

link doesnt work for me

i am sam2 · Post by **i am sam2** » Sat Jul 02, 2005 3:23 pm

that is a long ass set of lyrics

seanbryantkbq · Post by **seanbryantkbq** » Tue Jul 05, 2005 10:52 pm

ok i changed the link. tell me if you guys like it.

sunglassesatnight · Post by **sunglassesatnight** » Tue Jul 05, 2005 11:26 pm

Hey all, the lady is much good. The song, however is much bad.

seanbryantkbq · Post by **seanbryantkbq** » Tue Jul 05, 2005 11:48 pm

slimerdmb24 wrote:Hey all, the lady is much good. The song, however is much bad.

what?

thejoe · Post by **thejoe** » Wed Jul 06, 2005 12:36 am

cocaine?

seanbryantkbq · Post by **seanbryantkbq** » Wed Jul 06, 2005 11:55 pm

can i get some actual critiques.

sunglassesatnight · Post by **sunglassesatnight** » Thu Jul 07, 2005 8:28 am

seanbryantkbq wrote:
slimerdmb24 wrote:Hey all, the lady is much good. The song, however is much bad.
what?

"Es mucho bueno lady"

HCHaikuWarrior · Post by **HCHaikuWarrior** » Thu Jul 07, 2005 11:31 pm

Let the chemicals let me breathe
One more smoke
I know I said I’d quit but the stars tonight won’t make
Me believe what I said

i like that line, nice work.

Kahn · Post by **Kahn** » Fri Jul 08, 2005 12:02 am

I like the song, it has a Santana feel to it, its just the timing needs polishing.

Swede · Post by **Swede** » Sun Jul 10, 2005 2:50 am

hahaha the kilos

jsgksu · Post by **jsgksu** » Sun Jul 10, 2005 2:51 am

bring back the old av of the sitck figure lighting itself on fire