My newest original

freshead16 · Post by **freshead16** » Sat Apr 23, 2005 7:22 pm

Hey everyone, thought id put one of my originals up for critique. Its called "every little thing" Let me know what you guys think. thanks much

p.s. sorry bout the echo in my voice...a tad too much lol

http://www.purevolume.com/micahwetzel

DRMusic · Post by **DRMusic** » Sat Apr 23, 2005 7:44 pm

pretty sweet man. i agree too much echo, but the vocals and guitar are solid

DRMusic · Post by **DRMusic** » Sat Apr 23, 2005 7:50 pm

i dig the Road Lonely tune the most out of your music on purevolume.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sat Apr 23, 2005 8:33 pm

Im listenin to them all

pretty damn good. great vocals. guitar is plain but not bad. eh its gettin more exciting... this is really good stuff

every little thing has an average intro, but again the vocals are real good, try not to whine... the buildup to the chorus is great. great stuff man, keep workin and keep postin.

edit: listenin to road lonley... much better then the other stuff... this is one of the best originals ive heard on this site.

Dan5290 · Post by **Dan5290** » Sat Apr 23, 2005 10:48 pm

Very very good man. Every Little Thing was pretty good. Road Lonely was great, but Tomorrows Yesterdays was my favorite, especially because of the end.

Very good work, keep it up.

freshead16 · Post by **freshead16** » Sun Apr 24, 2005 2:50 pm

thanks for the critique guys. glad you seem to like road lonely too.

jaroben · Post by **jaroben** » Mon Apr 25, 2005 5:15 am

not bad... good luck.

Appfro · Post by **Appfro** » Mon Apr 25, 2005 1:13 pm

decent music but you should work on your vocals. they're nasally and at parts off key. sing from lower down if that makes sense. sit up straight and sing from your diaphragm.

freshead16 · Post by **freshead16** » Mon Apr 25, 2005 7:55 pm

Appfro wrote:decent music but you should work on your vocals. they're nasally and at parts off key. sing from lower down if that makes sense. sit up straight and sing from your diaphragm.

thanks for the critique...i know about this, ive been fighting this problem from day 1 (nasally). Ive improved quite a bit from the beginning but it still needs work. thanks though

Mjazk26 · Post by **Mjazk26** » Tue Apr 26, 2005 12:23 pm

freshead16 wrote:
Appfro wrote:decent music but you should work on your vocals. they're nasally and at parts off key. sing from lower down if that makes sense. sit up straight and sing from your diaphragm.
thanks for the critique...i know about this, ive been fighting this problem from day 1 (nasally). Ive improved quite a bit from the beginning but it still needs work. thanks though

I noticed this at first as well but the song was good enough to divert my attention away from it. Good job!

Mjazk26 · Post by **Mjazk26** » Tue Apr 26, 2005 12:26 pm

I would have to agree with Praisedave... Road Lonely is one of the best orginal songs I have heard posted on this site.

Appfro · Post by **Appfro** » Tue Apr 26, 2005 12:33 pm

Mjazk26 wrote:I would have to agree with Praisedave... Road Lonely is one of the best orginal songs I have heard posted on this site.

i may be wrong cause i haven't heard the song since i was little, but it sounds EXACTLY like Hello by Lionel Richie.

freshead16 · Post by **freshead16** » Tue Apr 26, 2005 2:08 pm

Appfro wrote:
Mjazk26 wrote:I would have to agree with Praisedave... Road Lonely is one of the best orginal songs I have heard posted on this site.
i may be wrong cause i haven't heard the song since i was little, but it sounds EXACTLY like Hello by Lionel Richie.

never heard of him or that song....but alright

Brock · Post by **Brock** » Tue Apr 26, 2005 2:36 pm

really never heard of lionel ritchie..?

freshead16 · Post by **freshead16** » Tue Apr 26, 2005 2:39 pm

well ive never heard of any of his songs....i really really need to widen my horizen of other music. sadly im pretty limited. ahah