Original, "Holding Me"..

JacknCoke · Post by **JacknCoke** » Mon Apr 11, 2005 10:28 pm

This is my first shot at singing and playing and putting it up on the boards..I just got a somewhat nice mic and mixer and all so here it is..criticism and comments are highly appreciated..i need all the help i can get..(don't we all

)...anyways, enjoy..

http://home.comcast.net/~edwardcw/holding_me.MP3

eliot1171 · Post by **eliot1171** » Mon Apr 11, 2005 11:04 pm

good job. its a simple guitar part which I like. Sometimes peope make their guitar part to flashy which takes away from the vocals, the most important part. Voice sounds good to.

What mic and int. did you get cause im looking to get one too.

JacknCoke · Post by **JacknCoke** » Mon Apr 11, 2005 11:12 pm

thanks a lot..ya, the guitar isnt anything flashy..it just clicked with the lyrics i wrote ..
as for the mic, im using a shure sm58 and a behringer eurotrack ub802 mixer..

rollmebackagain · Post by **rollmebackagain** » Mon Apr 11, 2005 11:23 pm

I've always wished I could sing well... you can... use it all you can... you're lucky...
great song, if you make a cd, I'll buy it...

JacknCoke · Post by **JacknCoke** » Mon Apr 11, 2005 11:34 pm

well thank you very much...ive been working on my voice for a good couple of months now..i know it needs a lot of work though....but believe me bud, i put this song up here never expecting a comment about my voice like the one you gave...keep working at it, its probably not as bad as you think..

T1nM4n · Post by **T1nM4n** » Tue Apr 12, 2005 10:01 am

ok first of all fucking awsome song dude, love it, and hte vocals are awsome i wish i had a voice like u too, ive only been singing for about 1 week or 2 , i can only hope to have a voice like urs sumday, 2nd of all ya, most people think there voices suck when they actually arent that bad, like me, except mine acually does suck

JacknCoke · Post by **JacknCoke** » Thu Apr 14, 2005 1:43 am

another other comments or tips/ideas would be greatly appreciated..thanks

lyrics101 · Post by **lyrics101** » Thu Apr 14, 2005 3:48 am

Your voice has a nice tone, but Ah, Aa (long A), Ee, Oh, Oo, are the vowels you should use. It sounds like you're breathing from the lungs- push it lower, sing from the abdomen, and try push the note forward in the mouth. Your nose should tickle a bit if you're getting it right.

Other than that, not my style of song, but it's pretty good; it'd definitely sell.

Teego Time · Post by **Teego Time** » Fri Apr 15, 2005 12:45 am

Definitely a good job on that one dude. The guitar was cool, melodic, although I found myself getting a little bored towards the end of the song. Maybe find something to mix it up a bit?

Also I could tell that you were straining to hit some of the high notes, as you went a little flat. It's ok though, just some more practice and you'll nail it.

Again though, good fucking job bud.

JacknCoke · Post by **JacknCoke** » Fri Apr 15, 2005 7:45 pm

thanks a lot guys for the replies...i do agree my voice needs work...im a smoker so it doesnt help much..:/ i was hoping to get enough positive responses to make an attempt at an open mic...ive never done one and the only thing holding me back has been my voice..lol, i dont wont to be that fool up there ya know

lyrics101 · Post by **lyrics101** » Sun Apr 17, 2005 12:47 am

JacknCoke wrote:thanks a lot guys for the replies...i do agree my voice needs work...im a smoker so it doesnt help much..:/ i was hoping to get enough positive responses to make an attempt at an open mic...ive never done one and the only thing holding me back has been my voice..lol, i dont wont to be that fool up there ya know

Smoking inhibits your voice a lot less than you'd expect.

Personally, you have a nice tone, but no control over it whatsoever.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Sun Apr 17, 2005 9:58 am

this is really good
really really good

I think you should add an instrumental solo/breakdown before the last chorus. just a 4 measure thing. I'd love to help you out if you pm me the chords in the verse ill give somethin a shot. if you dont wanna give away your "secret" tahts cool too

great work man, keep on postin

You_Enjoy_Myself · Post by **You_Enjoy_Myself** » Sun Apr 17, 2005 10:19 am

Yeah, this sounded good dude, you DO have a good voice. Simple guitar, but it was a good simple, not a boring simple. I really like the melody line during the "Close my eyes" part. Very good song dude, keep it up.

JacknCoke · Post by **JacknCoke** » Sun Apr 17, 2005 9:00 pm

once again, thanks for the good words guys...i think i have my answer....and i think this will be the first song i play at the open mic...thanks again, very much appreciated

GreedylilPig · Post by **GreedylilPig** » Mon Apr 18, 2005 1:27 am

Excellent original song - I'm keeping this one. Great voice. The Shure sm58 really picks it up well. You really have a songwriting talent. Keep it up and definitely be sure to keep posting in the future.

What kind of guitar are you using?