original song.

NoNotThat · Post by **NoNotThat** » Mon Feb 14, 2005 7:32 pm

I really hate writing but I want to start liking it, and people told me the only thing I can do is keep plugging away at it.

So...yeah. this is called Foolish.

Tranman66 · Post by **Tranman66** » Mon Feb 14, 2005 7:44 pm

this is quite good. The vocal should be louder at the beginning. Great vocal again. love to hear it once its fully developed. Great feel.

hmm69 · Post by **hmm69** » Mon Feb 14, 2005 8:00 pm

i like it good groove

eliot1171 · Post by **eliot1171** » Mon Feb 14, 2005 11:05 pm

Really good, I like it. I like the progression on the verse, and I agree with Trann, it needs to be a bit louder at the beginning, not too much I like it quiet.

NoNotThat · Post by **NoNotThat** » Tue Feb 15, 2005 9:00 pm

thanks for the feedback.

MWR · Post by **MWR** » Wed Feb 16, 2005 3:46 pm

The guitar on this one is excellent. Really nice.
The melody and phrasing for the verse is great. I love the transition from the chorus back to the verse.

Keep writing and posting. If you don't I'll be forced to kill you until you die.

fatjack · Post by **fatjack** » Wed Feb 16, 2005 10:35 pm

PRETTY

certainly better than anything i've ever recorded

TaylorGuy110 · Post by **TaylorGuy110** » Wed Feb 16, 2005 11:26 pm

sounds good keep it going!

Grandpagotgame · Post by **Grandpagotgame** » Wed Feb 23, 2005 10:06 am

Keep it up man that is pretty good. Really nice guitar piece, you could get somewhere with your skills.

jellyfish · Post by **jellyfish** » Wed Feb 23, 2005 10:13 am

fatjack wrote:PRETTY

certainly better than anything i've ever recorded

I take it back FJ. You do deliver compliments and humble yourself in the same sentence! WTG

Speenis · Post by **Speenis** » Wed Feb 23, 2005 2:57 pm

MWR wrote:The guitar on this one is excellent. Really nice.
The melody and phrasing for the verse is great. I love the transition from the chorus back to the verse.

Keep writing and posting. If you don't I'll be forced to kill you until you die.

katie · Post by **katie** » Mon Feb 28, 2005 2:52 pm

sarah, you really found a great way to express yourself in a unique, original fashion.

I thought this song was dissidant and pretty, slightly ominous.

the chorus is awesome, I'm burning rage...

I'm glad I was able to hear it and I agree, and I'm glad you kept plugging away at it.

NoNotThat · Post by **NoNotThat** » Mon Feb 28, 2005 7:27 pm

thanks

Swede · Post by **Swede** » Mon Feb 28, 2005 7:28 pm

nice Sarah!

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Mon Feb 28, 2005 7:29 pm

me like, it reminds me alot of damien rice.

keep postin