NEW ORIGINAL FROM PRAISE!!!! PLEASE CRIT!

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 5:18 pm

http://www.purevolume.com/andymangold

its called rockingchair. my previous statement stands, if you would like to write and record lyrics i would be extremely grateful. this ones probably a bit easier to sing with then seagull. thanks in advance

MWR · Post by **MWR** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 6:20 pm

You do realize how similar this is to your other one right?

They both start softly and at exactly 20 seconds the stumming comes in. The tempo is just a bit slower on rockingchair but listen to these back to back and you'll hear how they only differ ever so slighty.
You gotta pay more attention to song structure. There are a whole bunch of things you can use to switch it up i.e. Time signature, tempo, key changes, rythmic asymmety etc.
Anyway, this is a very slight variation on what you already have. You need to put them together and write a bridge and a chorus and then you'll have one complete song.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 6:48 pm

well i was tryin to define a style that i could use as my base. they are the same structure, but different chords, riff, time, well almost everything else. they are probably a bit to similar. thanks for the crit mike.

other people: does this vary enough from seagull?

Swede · Post by **Swede** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 6:59 pm

who is that in your AV?

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 7:01 pm

Swede wrote:who is that in your AV?

me

Swede · Post by **Swede** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 7:06 pm

could you make a AV for me? we have always been friend! right?

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 7:06 pm

Swede wrote:could you make a AV for me? we have always been friend! right?

sure. just send me the pics.

Swede · Post by **Swede** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 7:07 pm

how many do you need?

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 7:09 pm

Swede wrote:how many do you need?

as many as you would like circulating

Swede · Post by **Swede** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 7:10 pm

ok, i´ll have to send them from my cell phone, give me your mail and i´ll send 4-5 pics when i get home from work!! sounds good?

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 7:11 pm

Swede wrote:ok, i´ll have to send them from my cell phone, give me your mail and i´ll send 4-5 pics when i get home from work!! sounds good?

thats cool man, just pm me, i dont wanna jack my own thread. admangold@comcast.net

dmbguitar718 · Post by **dmbguitar718** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 7:15 pm

This has a solid start, but it kinda goes downhill. I think your problem is that you are trying too hard to create this amazing guitar piece, rather than to just make music. I think the second makes it a little jumbled at times as well. But yeah, focus on the music as a whole rather than trying to create this amazing riff.

I'm not trying to be a dick, if that's what you're thinking. Just giving my two cents.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 7:17 pm

dmbguitar718 wrote:This has a solid start, but it kinda goes downhill. I think your problem is that you are trying too hard to create this amazing guitar piece, rather than to just make music. I think the second makes it a little jumbled at times as well. But yeah, focus on the music as a whole rather than trying to create this amazing riff.

I'm not trying to be a dick, if that's what you're thinking. Just giving my two cents.

of course i dont think your tryin to be a dick. honest crit is always welcome.

what do you mean by second in "the second makes it a little bit jumbled"

thanks for the comments!

dmbguitar718 · Post by **dmbguitar718** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 7:19 pm

Oh shoot, I meant second track.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Mon Feb 07, 2005 7:21 pm

dmbguitar718 wrote:Oh shoot, I meant second track.

okay, i was definetly questoining adding it, but without it the riff part sounds so empty compared to the strummed part. this just kinda leveled the playing field a bit i thought. ill post it without the 2nd track if you guys would like.
thanks pat!