Can I please get feedback on my song

brian cali · Post by **brian cali** » Sun Jan 02, 2005 8:28 pm

Please let me know what you think-

http://s19.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=2D2J ... 84I1MXREVB

Thanks,

Brian

gumbomadness · Post by **gumbomadness** » Sun Jan 02, 2005 8:30 pm

hey! welcome to dmbtabs.com!
You dont have to be so polite you know... most people would have probably put "Critique this BITCHES!" or something..
I'm gonna give you a full review in 30 seconds.. i have to switch computers to listen to it.

Tranman66 · Post by **Tranman66** » Sun Jan 02, 2005 8:38 pm

i thought i was an instrumental at first. then i heard the vocal and it gets a lot better. I suggest removing the pause to make it more like an intro. i like it man. Good song. it has a great feel to it with that lead.

brian cali · Post by **brian cali** » Sun Jan 02, 2005 8:42 pm

I am going to remove the instrumental part and have the strings come in as a a solo intro similar to Jon Butler Trios "what you want". Thanks for the feedback.

Brian

gumbomadness · Post by **gumbomadness** » Sun Jan 02, 2005 8:46 pm

I liked the introduction alot...
the vocals are good and in key but at 1:39 it seems you were a little bit off.
The lead is cool, is that a slide i hear?
The chorus was catchy..and the solo was pretty awesome.
What guitar(s) are you playing? What kind of setup do you have?
You should post lyrics here too.
That... cello or whatever it is in the back, are you playing it? (was a nice touch)
Anyway, i liked this song and i look foreward to hearing more!

You_Enjoy_Myself · Post by **You_Enjoy_Myself** » Sun Jan 02, 2005 8:54 pm

Hey great job, this sounded really smooth. One minor thing, I think the lead guitar should sound a little stronger, right now it sounds a little weak and hollow. But that's being pretty nitpicky. I really liked this one, great voice and nice lryics.

brian cali · Post by **brian cali** » Sun Jan 02, 2005 8:54 pm

I am playing a Martin run through a DD-5 with the revolving feature on coll edit pro. Their are two guitar tracks and no slide is played at all. Just a simlple little country blues riff. The strings section in the background was done on piano by me. The song will be reworked this week and I am hoping to have an updated one by Friday. Thank you again for the feedback.

Brian

gumbomadness · Post by **gumbomadness** » Sun Jan 02, 2005 9:05 pm

tbillie41 · Post by **tbillie41** » Sun Jan 02, 2005 10:52 pm

this is really good man, i liked it a lot.

brian cali · Post by **brian cali** » Mon Jan 03, 2005 8:41 pm

Thanks for all of the constructive feedback. Does anyone else have anything to add?

Brian

a1075dd63aa12 · Post by **a1075dd63aa12** » Mon Jan 03, 2005 8:43 pm

I liked it, i think all of the comments made so far are spot on, but overall a good song

a1075dd63aa12 · Post by **a1075dd63aa12** » Mon Jan 03, 2005 8:43 pm

by the way, welcome