My Originals

kcw · Post by **kcw** » Sun Sep 19, 2004 7:32 pm

Well here is a link to some of my original songs. I couldnt put them all there cause I only had 20mb of space, and each of my songs are like 5mb. And just to let you know Everyday is not a dave cover i wrote a song called Everyday.Tell me what you think and how I can improve.

http://www.angelfire.com/rock3/kylewalkley

filmdude100cms · Post by **filmdude100cms** » Sun Sep 19, 2004 7:56 pm

why cant it be like the movies- its good, but your playing the stuff after the intro too fast, like just like maybe 1 note per measure to fast, i thought ok his singing will be fast, but then you sang at the tempo i thought the music should have gone... i like this song though....

meant to be-good, nothin wrong with it.

man in the moon- see above

i like all your stuff, id buy a CD.

kcw · Post by **kcw** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 7:54 pm

Thanks. Can some other people post a critique also!

HumbleMonkey · Post by **HumbleMonkey** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 8:24 pm

i think the guitar is good, i dont really dig your singing though, i think your voice just isnt my style, im not saying its bad cause its not but just not my style, good job overall

kcw · Post by **kcw** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 8:28 pm

How is it punkish?

HumbleMonkey · Post by **HumbleMonkey** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 8:31 pm

i dont know exactly what it is, maybe thats not the right word to describe it but thats just what came to my mind

Ryeguy · Post by **Ryeguy** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 8:33 pm

I don't see how its punkish

HumbleMonkey · Post by **HumbleMonkey** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 8:35 pm

everyone please forgive me for saying punkish, i dont know what it is, i cant explain it

kcw · Post by **kcw** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 8:36 pm

I dont know tell me if Im wrong but I find my original songs to be a style of their own.

HumbleMonkey · Post by **HumbleMonkey** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 8:41 pm

i definitely agree, i do love how you do have your own style

kcw · Post by **kcw** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 8:43 pm

Any suggestions on how to make it better?

HumbleMonkey · Post by **HumbleMonkey** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 8:48 pm

i think its good and dont really know how to make it better, you guitar is real nice and you got playing with singing down good, i guess just keep playing. and forget what i said about the voice, there was just something with the first song but the others were i liked, keep posting cause i would like to hear more

MWR · Post by **MWR** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 9:25 pm

kcw wrote:Any suggestions on how to make it better?

Your vocals are really nasal/whiny.

I think Humblemonkey was trying to say it sounded emoish which I would agree with.

The songs themselves show promise and you do have some style of your own but there needs to be more rhythmic and harmonic variety in your playing. Close my Eyes for example used the same riff with slight variations thru the whole song and the rest of them seemed to suffer from this as well. Try changing keys, tempo, time signatures, or rhythm to add some variety. A song can't stay in the same place for so long imo. There are exceptions to that of course but they're few and far between.

Hope that wasn't too harsh but I like to actually critique in the recording/critiquing forum.

kcw · Post by **kcw** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 9:40 pm

Its alright man thats why i posted them to get feedback. I know my singing is nasaly ive been working on that for a while and its a lot better than what it was a year ago. Keep in mind ive only been writing good stuff for about a year and i'm learning more about it all the time. So how would I go about changing the keys and stuff like making that in a verse or bridge or what.

HumbleMonkey · Post by **HumbleMonkey** » Mon Sep 20, 2004 9:46 pm

about the nasaly singing thing, i have this book about singing and it talks about nasaly singing. if u want tomorrow i can post what it says