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trippinants13 · Post by **trippinants13** » Sat Mar 13, 2004 1:01 pm

Not many new posts here in the last few days so ,mI put this back up. I didn't get many responses the last time I posted this since I was a newbie in the angelfire area. Anyway here it is again.

http://www.angelfire.com/vamp/trippinants13/

GreedylilPig · Post by **GreedylilPig** » Sat Mar 13, 2004 1:06 pm

Enjoyable. Interesting rendition. However, I think that your guitar is turned up too loud. It's drowning out your already somewhat whispery vocals. I think a little more passion in your voice might yield a significant improvement. Also, on the guitar, I think you put too much emphasis on the G-string of the octave. Your strumming rhythm for the chorus was a bit off as well and your vocals seem to be struggling a little bit there, too. This is all meant to be constructive. Not bad, though. Thanks for posting.

trippinants13 · Post by **trippinants13** » Sat Mar 13, 2004 1:28 pm

Thanks man. Yeah, the singing is a work of art in its on leauge. In fact I couldn't even open my mouth and play at the same time until about 6 months ago. thanks for the remarks. That song def. needs to be played on a 12. It's okay on a six but to do any justice a 12 is needed.

Matty Boom · Post by **Matty Boom** » Sat Mar 13, 2004 2:34 pm

before i listen, to make this song sound fuller on a 6, you can leave the d open and let the ring and/or tune your high down to a d and let that ring

Matty Boom · Post by **Matty Boom** » Sat Mar 13, 2004 2:41 pm

alright, definitely not bad...what brian said about your voice getting drowned out was dead on....during the chorus, your voice really struggles to stay in key, which takes practice and singing louder really helps....i didn't see much of a problem with the chorus strumming, but the verse has a little hitch where it just doesn't come out smoothly....this is all constructive criticism so keep posting!

trippinants13 · Post by **trippinants13** » Sat Mar 13, 2004 2:48 pm

that's a good idea I'll have to give it a try thanks guys

mdel21 · Post by **mdel21** » Sat Mar 13, 2004 4:22 pm

Not bad.