Second recording *Stain*

Appfro · Post by **Appfro** » Thu Jan 25, 2007 7:14 pm

Don't think i ever posted this one but i wrote it about a year and a half ago. sorry for the shitty recording, i'm still trying to figure out where i can put my mic so it doesn't pic up too much bass but it was too far down the fretboard. i didn't feel like redoing it, so hope you like it.

It's called Stain

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Stain

I think I am confused
Don’t know who you think you are
You must be the Son of Man
God’s next bright shining star

So you know when it’s going to end
You know when it all falls down
But you’d rather gloat for praise
Then help to save a crowd

Chorus
But I know who you are
You’re the stain on our purity
And I know who you are

Nothing less than confused
Somewhere I have lost my place
My existence all for none
Oh God please show me the way
From all this pain
All the shame
From this hate
And this fate
Is it too late
For me

Chorus

Chorus
And I know who you are
You’re the stain on my purity
Through my eyes staring back at me
In the mirror the hate I see
All the evil I see in me
All my pride and my foolish greed
All my pride and my foolish greed

I will destroy you

iha · Post by **iha** » Thu Jan 25, 2007 7:19 pm

i keep getting

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Appfro · Post by **Appfro** » Thu Jan 25, 2007 7:20 pm

that happened to me the other day w/ someone else's file. i'll upload it in ysi. just a min

iha · Post by **iha** » Thu Jan 25, 2007 7:23 pm

hey, i got it to work finally. i just kept clicking the link. took about 10 clicks.

philtheman · Post by **philtheman** » Thu Jan 25, 2007 8:12 pm

listening now, so far so good...call me crazy but sort of incubus/pearl jam sounding, you probably hate me now

I like your voice, I like the raspyness to it.
Pretty simple throughout, could use some strings maybe? Like some fat chello. But overall a cool song. Strong voice and quality could be cleaner. What equip. are you using? Guitar, mics, etc.

mangold · Post by **mangold** » Thu Jan 25, 2007 10:49 pm

very dark vibe in the beginning. i definitely get an incubus feel from this and thats a huge compliment coming from me. i love incubus so damn much.

your voice is strong on this one mitchles. it has a really sweet tone to it.

the only critiques i would have is that there isnt much variation in the song, i feel like you have a great progression and rhythm for a verse, but the chorus should maybe switch to open chords and a different strumming pattern. i keep waiting for it to like "break" and start like rockin out (maybe because of the incubus influence) but it doesnt.

the solo in the middle is pretty sweet, a little latin influence maybe?

as i continue to listen i would say that it probably wouldnt lose anything from being a bit shorter.

overall kickass work as always. keep it up

mbent4679 · Post by **mbent4679** » Fri Jan 26, 2007 12:06 am

Very dark and interesting. All in all I liked it, but I lost interest about half way through. The guitar licks at the end help a little but by the time they kick in I've allready lost interest.

Like the raspy voice wondering if you you could add a loud yell of distress in the song somewhere to add color.

iha · Post by **iha** » Fri Jan 26, 2007 12:15 am

mbent4679 wrote:Very dark and interesting. All in all I liked it, but I lost interest about half way through. The guitar licks at the end help a little but by the time they kick in I've allready lost interest.

this is how i felt pretty much.

Appfro · Post by **Appfro** » Fri Jan 26, 2007 7:32 am

it is quite long and i apologize for that. if you look back, all of my songs are. not sure what i can do to fix it cause everytime i cut them down, i feel like i'm taking stuff out that i want to be there. but i'll look into it.

i'm using a martin d-16gt, a condensor mic, a 10 dollar mic i got w/ the mic stand, a eurorack ub802, a digitech recording pedal, and running the sound via usb into my computer and recording w/ adobe audition.

i'll look into a yell, but i'm going ot have to start taking vocal lessons soon. the raspiness i can deal w/ but i'm starting to not be able to hit my notes and i'm starting to sound nasaly. i even had to redo this one once it sounded so bad. i think it might have something to do w/ my sinuses, but i'll hopefully get it worked out.

thanks for the comments guys and for listening. i appreciate you taking the time.

sfmartins · Post by **sfmartins** » Fri Jan 26, 2007 8:54 am

I just now had the opportunity to listen to it!

I like the "dark feeling" and the "incubus feeling" mentioned above.

Your voice sounds pretty good, but your recording equipment produces a rather poor guitar sound quality... I guess you already know that anyway!

Nice job overall!

Keep them coming!

Appfro · Post by **Appfro** » Sun Jan 28, 2007 10:02 pm

so i think i reworked a way to shorten the song and add a good loud yell. i'll try to do a re-recording tomorrow and post.

AustinG · Post by **AustinG** » Mon Jan 29, 2007 3:13 am

I Liked this, I too thought it was Incubis like... Whom I dig with greatness..
I too would have liked you to rock it out at the end..and maybe shorten it up, i'd like to hear 3..3 1/2 mintues of this...

I just think you need some new recording eq... All your shit is on, your recording quality is taking away from it.. Needs to sound more alive in my face...I'm sure you know this..

If some asshole like myself typed that to me I'd say, "Hey asshole do you have a grand laying around for me to fix that?" At which time I'd reply.. sorry I was being an asshole

Appfro · Post by **Appfro** » Wed Jan 31, 2007 6:12 pm

hey guys, if you would listen to the song one more time, i made it shorter, but accidentally made it slower, so it's close to the same length, but if you want a 3 minute song out of me, you won't get it

but it sounds better recording-wise, i cut a chorus and added a yell, so let me know what you think

*links are in op*

mbent4679 · Post by **mbent4679** » Wed Jan 31, 2007 6:32 pm

oooo Like the vocals before the lick playing. A nice loud note puts the lead part on a platform. Good job. Found this one more interesting. big improvement

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Appfro · Post by **Appfro** » Fri Feb 02, 2007 7:19 am

mbent4679 wrote:oooo Like the vocals before the lick playing. A nice loud note puts the lead part on a platform. Good job. Found this one more interesting. big improvement .

thanks. i tried to use some of the suggestions here to fix it up, i'm glad you liked it. what about the recording quality, better? i used the same equipment, but i put the mic in another place and i double mic'd the guitar and laid the vocals separate this time to try to make it sound better. i'm still trying to put as little post recording effects on my recordings as possible but i did add a lot of reverb to the scream.

anyway, thanks for the listen. i greatly appreciate it

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Second recording Stain

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