You thought the vocals were quite. I turned it up to hear the guitar and the vocals were booming compared to it. I'm not going to lie, it was a bit repetative but the lyrics have potential. Your voice sounds ok but the solo at the end seem pretty out of place.
Your guitar playing is fine. But the guitar sounds weird, metallic, like you are using a quater for a pick or something. To be honest your singing isnt very good. I think it would be a good idea to do some vocal exercises in order to learn how to sing on key. The song is very repetative. Keep working at it. Youve got the guitar skills. Work on your voice, it can improve.
