clip of a new song

[dmbguitar718]

i wrote this today after school (on the piano this time!). it's pretty much the first that ive written that has a lyrical theme to it. it's basically about me selfish, wondering what sets me apart from the less fortunate. they're always told to "try a little harder...be a little stronger..." but honestly, i ahven't done much, yet here i am living in a very fortunate family.

i'm defintely not done, but i WILL be finishing this one. also, i didn't record this track with a metronome, so it's probably out a bit.

thanks in advance.

http://www.patmcinnis.com/sofort.mp3

[rockyall107]

sounds good so far..cant wait to hear the finished product

[i am sam2]

holy shit if you dont sound like the beatles (john/paul) then i dont know who does. damn. thats good too. and the lyrics arent corney...good job...but i want to hear the guitar!!

[dmbguitar718]

thanks. i'll see where it goes, and see if i add some guitar. i'd like to add some clean/soft electric.

i still need to work things out, i was just wondering what you guys thought of it so far.

[gumbomadness]

i like it. its simple-- which does NOT mean bad.
you sound like you have an accent.

i cant wait to hear the uber powerful bridge to this song.

[CWMCALL]

that sounds great Pat!

[lozthegreat]

i like it. At first i thought you were playing Bryan Adams - "Heaven" sounds just like the intro. Good job though.

[Kukini]

good start, you should sing in your clips of guitar.

[EnFuego]

file not found for me

[mangold]

i got an error and i wanna listen