cant decide if these lyrics suck or are good help please

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cant decide if these lyrics suck or are good help please

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From what I can see
It seems to me
We meet eye to eye
We look up into the same blue sky

We were perfect together
But a storm came along
Looked around but you were gone
And now its nothing but bad stormy weather

We were starting off good
And we started off fine
I thought it was understood that
I would be yours and
you would be miiine

Close the windows and shut the doors
Watch from inside cause down the rain pours
Hide inside with complete dismay
As I watch the lighting strike and you slip away

We were perfect together
But a storm came along
Looked around but you were gone
And now its nothing but bad stormy weather
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Post by Kahn »

not bad. Put them with some music before anyone can really decide though
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I agree

Post by Taylor614CE »

It's hard to tell what it will be like w/o the music...but lyrics alone sound good.
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Post by a1075dd63aa12 »

i like them, they are solid
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Post by i am sam2 »

And now its nothing but bad stormy weather
that line looks to be a bit hard to sing and have fit...
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Post by catho »

i am sam2 wrote:
And now its nothing but bad stormy weather
that line looks to be a bit hard to sing and have fit...
Just make like Dave and expand it over two bars with prolonged notes or scatting to fill it out.
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Post by jdub »

looks good, but i would change the lines that say "bad stormy weather", change the word bad or omit it
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i dont like rhyming lyrics personally, but i find thats all my subconcious will let me write
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