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[wench]

This is just some song i wrote called Gone. It's rough, and i still gotta finish the lyrics and shit but this is basically it.

http://www.angelfire.com/droid/music16/

[allfalldown]

Kind of had a Billy Corgan voice sound to it. I liked it overall - it seemed like the guitar needed to be a little cleaner on a few of those chords, but other than that, pretty good in my opinion.

Also, I think it was a little too long in continuing on with the same chords in that last minute or two when there was no lyrics. I think you just need to come up with an ending for it and be done.

[wench]

The end was way too fucking long. It was pretty much improv, and i just couldn't get moving for a second there. Take every little riff from the end, cut it in half, and you'll get closer to what i usually play there.

Thanks for the input. The Billy Corgan thing has made my day[/i]

[myxomatosis]

I agree that you sound a lot like Billy Corgan. I've been an big SP fan for a while so I liked how it sounded, although your voice could use some work. I thought the guitar sounded cool, and I liked the lyrics too. It sounded like you recorded it in a not so good recording set up (the faint poping noises), but I thought it made the song even better

[wench]

Thanks dude.

$8.00 computer mic from Walmart 8)

[wench]

shameless bump

I liked how it sounded, although your voice could use some work.

Where would you suggest i start with regards to making my voice not blow

[myxomatosis]

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Where would you suggest i start with regards to making my voice not blow

ha, I guess you could use some work in the same way that a lot of people say Billy Corgan could use some work