new song idea (please listen)

[superman0710]

tell me what y'all think

i know the words at the beginning are muffled, that's becase i was just really talking nonsense lyrics to fill in the time.

also, in the final edit i'd fix the echo level conflicting with the singing voice. (or put less echo)

other than that, tell me what you think. do you dig the rhythm, the singing (is it ok?), etc. remember this is an idea i came up with and recorded today so it's rough

thanks for the critique.

http://www.rampromotions.com/lost.mp3 (1.6mb)

[DustyDave]

Ok the rhythm rocks , i really dig that for sure , and the voice is ok too , but i think a couple times , the echo gets a little too violent and sorta falls out of the song , but the idea is great overall

[superman0710]

Ok the rhythm rocks , i really dig that for sure , and the voice is ok too , but i think a couple times , the echo gets a little too violent and sorta falls out of the song , but the idea is great overall

do you think the voice sounds good though? (you said "ok") i'll work on this song and clean it up and then repost the final product when i can